07-08-2016, 12:52 PM
Luna, I considered your feedback carefully, and I decided to first try restructuring the 4th strophe to highlight the words that characterize the thought patters of the Watch Man. The detail (I hope) serves dual purposes in reinforcing the precise nature of the person's world and their ideas.
And, I'm still thinking about the final stanza and the ending line. Thanks again for the feedback
lizziep
And, I'm still thinking about the final stanza and the ending line. Thanks again for the feedback
lizziep