Wind Fantasy - edit2, title change

[Lizzie]

@lizziep - the new first line is less generic, but (to me) smells slightly of the lamp.  You be the judge... And "stormy" rather than "ephemeral."  Plus additional changes per your fine critique.

Edit 2


Wind Fantasy


Who hasn’t heard a tale of careless wind? -- I can see what you're saying about the lamp and smelling like it. Maybe. I still think it's better, though. In general, I feel like the first 4 lines run the risk of seeming old-fashioned and, hence, making your views seem old fashioned as well. It's a tough one, because it could also read as classic, time-honored, etc. For me, it would depend on the audience you are trying to appeal to and the tone that would best persuade them. And, if no audience is sought, then just to please yourself!
It drove old sailors on with shifting force
and primed the lips of lovers who had sinned,
then called each other feathers blown off-course. -- like the changes in here
Today our science sees gas particles
with wind their average speed, direction, scents, -- I feel like "their average speed, direction, scents" needs to be set off somehow as a separate phrase. 
arrests its gusts in windmill manacles
to power cities’ grid-establishments.
But wind’s inconstant, fleeting as desire - 
what moves us to prefer its fickle flow
to take the place of coal’s pent saffron fire,
a heady rush displacing steady glow?
We’ll have our stormy flutter but return -- I do like stormy better 
with time to coal, and constancy’s long burn.