06-28-2016, 02:21 AM
Dale,
I think that what you said about the meticulousness of the routine is very interesting and makes the setup work for me. The comparison to an IKEA manual made me laugh, and I can see how that could be a danger. However, I never found the first two stanzas boring; I don't need poetry to read like a Michael Bay movie to make it interesting. I think you have a more understated personality. Some unexpected comparisons in the first two stanzas might help everybody stay engaged with you without compromising the voice.
I think that what you said about the meticulousness of the routine is very interesting and makes the setup work for me. The comparison to an IKEA manual made me laugh, and I can see how that could be a danger. However, I never found the first two stanzas boring; I don't need poetry to read like a Michael Bay movie to make it interesting. I think you have a more understated personality. Some unexpected comparisons in the first two stanzas might help everybody stay engaged with you without compromising the voice.