06-27-2016, 10:31 AM
I don't like poems that capitalize the first word of every line. Sorry. Need to say that up front.
The poem itself is a vis-a'-vis of implied meaning. Now you see me, now you don't. That's the way it reads to me. It might or it might not. I don't mind the subject and you do end on somewhat a positive note...so I like that it has a somewhat finish to it. A "just not today" attitude. The earthy tone is good (e.g. terra cotta, all the flowers) and it is consistent. The language of the poem is a plus for me.
I don't know...the poem is so unexciting that it doesn't excite me too much as a reader. Show me a reason to care.
The poem itself is a vis-a'-vis of implied meaning. Now you see me, now you don't. That's the way it reads to me. It might or it might not. I don't mind the subject and you do end on somewhat a positive note...so I like that it has a somewhat finish to it. A "just not today" attitude. The earthy tone is good (e.g. terra cotta, all the flowers) and it is consistent. The language of the poem is a plus for me.
I don't know...the poem is so unexciting that it doesn't excite me too much as a reader. Show me a reason to care.