06-22-2016, 05:19 AM
Yeah sort of cliche ridden.
This line
"I take a telepathic head count" makes no sense. Telepathy is communication between minds. Maybe telekinetic would be more of a fit.
Plus it seems a bit overblown. I have pretty bad thyroid problems along with with worse things. I'm all for hyperbole, but this seems to push things a bit far. Actually this seems much more energetic than someone with fatigue would tend to write.
Best,
dale
This line
"I take a telepathic head count" makes no sense. Telepathy is communication between minds. Maybe telekinetic would be more of a fit.
Plus it seems a bit overblown. I have pretty bad thyroid problems along with with worse things. I'm all for hyperbole, but this seems to push things a bit far. Actually this seems much more energetic than someone with fatigue would tend to write.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.