Thyroid: Revision

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Thyroid

Hormonal imbalance wrecks me
Like an internal hurricane
Devastating metabolism.
 
I take a telepathic head count
Before I go for labs;
Free T4 and TSH.
 
My energy floats on waves
Bringing stress to the simplest days,
And the medication hits my liver
Like twenty alcoholics
 
Everyone is accounted for;
All the primaries in place
Until someone dies or moves
To another state.
 
I drop radioactive iodine
On the doctor’s call,
And wonder who’ll take the head count
When I’m gone.
 
Four weeks later;
I’m the rendering of fatigue;
Monitoring the size of my thyroid.
 
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Revision 1 (working with word choices)

Thyroid

 
 
Hormonal imbalance wrecks me
Like an internal hurricane
Devastating metabolism.
 
I take a telepathic head count
Before I go to diagnostics for blood work
Every six weeks.
 
My energy floats on waves
Bringing stress to the mellowest existence
And the medication hits my liver
Like twenty alcoholics.
 
Everyone is accounted for;
All the primaries, established
Until someone dies or moves
To another state.
 
I drop radioactive iodine
On the doctor’s call,
And wonder who’ll take the head count
When I’m gone.
 
Four weeks later;
I’m the rendering of fatigue;
Monitoring the size of my thyroid.
 

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