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06-19-2016, 06:05 AM

Hey JLY. Interesting flip but you tightrope on cliche with "running through my mind." I would prefer "runs" to "running". The immediacy of the image distracts from the cliche and camouflages it better. Just a thought.
Paul

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neighbor's cat - by justlikeyou - 06-19-2016, 01:45 AM

RE: neighbor's cat - by Tiger the Lion - 06-19-2016, 06:05 AM

RE: neighbor's cat - by justlikeyou - 06-19-2016, 07:51 AM

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