06-15-2016, 08:05 PM
Hi Mark,
Thank you very much for your comments!
I have been watching a lot of football (European cup) so I have not worked too much on an edit, but an edit is on its way.
About the contradiction of forever and in the end, it was intentional, sort of a "time is an illusion" thing, but I am not sure it works too well.
In my first workings of this poem I had a repeat sign for the first 2 stanzas so they would form an infinite loop, but I don't know how to make those symbols on a computer and thought they did not make much difference..But they probably do..I still think I will go with something like "it seemed like forever, the head chased the tail"..
I think I also will move up the comparisons above "the connecting body"..
The idea is that everything is connected, but we forget about it and see all as separate events..both the ouroboros (I did not know of that name though) and yin and yang has been big inspirations for this piece.
Again, thank you!
Thank you very much for your comments!
I have been watching a lot of football (European cup) so I have not worked too much on an edit, but an edit is on its way.
About the contradiction of forever and in the end, it was intentional, sort of a "time is an illusion" thing, but I am not sure it works too well.
In my first workings of this poem I had a repeat sign for the first 2 stanzas so they would form an infinite loop, but I don't know how to make those symbols on a computer and thought they did not make much difference..But they probably do..I still think I will go with something like "it seemed like forever, the head chased the tail"..
I think I also will move up the comparisons above "the connecting body"..
The idea is that everything is connected, but we forget about it and see all as separate events..both the ouroboros (I did not know of that name though) and yin and yang has been big inspirations for this piece.
Again, thank you!