Run

[Achebe]

Run

This can't be about the mice, the prince, the slipper
Because that's not where I am.        ...a rather blah line. I suppose you mean 'I'm not at that stage in life where I get excited by princes and promises to the ball..or fairy stories. But the 'this' followed by the 'that' is quite unpoetic. 'Where I am' in this context is mildly cliched.

I'm afraid I bought the time share.
I'm outside of it far more than in it- ......isn't that normal for time shares? Unless there's a double meaning here

and my daydreaming mind just wants. ...... I find that 'and' is an easily abused conjunction 
done with it.
I was so excited when I got the dress,
When I ran my finger over the vellum invitation.
I admit I am old enough to get excited over stationary.
I did what girls are supposed to do.
And now I feel like
I'm patting the walls down a pitch black hall-
a dim light grows brighter as I near it.
My cat sleeps in all the boxes I brought home.
He keeps my council, unblinking.
He blots my tears.
I have figured myself about fifteen years too late.
I no longer give a fuck about weeding
or tater tot casseroles,
or the cult of Pinterest.
I'm putting down landscape fabric and a ton of rock--
There. Done. I'm leaving my phone.
I don't care who poked me.
I toss an apple and a shiny water canteen in the car-
I put on my running shoes and run, and run--I feel my heart hammering
  -the sweat is like a baptism- the rush I feel-
I stop in the woods, my hands on my knees, panting.
I'm alone now,
but not lonely like before.

Hi Vanity - a lovely one from you again. I am a sucker for narratives, and you do it quite well.
I need to go back to your other pome - just not getting the time at the moment.
In this one:
1) too many I's. It doesn't look deliberate, so you might want to fix that through conjunctions or sentence restructuring.
2) A couple of thoughts inline above. Since this is 'mild'' I don't think line by line feedback is what you're after.
3) the bit about running is almost an afterthought - doesn't fit in well with the long preamble

This looks like a good poem to workshop. Could be a jewel with a few edits

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Pardon the typos. Handheld.