I am But a Man

[Marymic]

I really like the build with the adding of a new line. The emotion builds as the structure builds, I wonder whether it would be stronger it end with 3 lines instead of four.



I am but a man,
do not let me see the monsters,
the ones who were left to rot.


I am but a man,
do not let the cold grasp of sorrow, i really like the grasp, and hands metafore
with its hands ever reaching into my heart,
reap my freedom and will like the crop of souls.


I am but a man,
do not let me see the hatred,
those who have seen it with their lifeless eyes,  i find this stanza too confusing and the confusion takes away the power. . do you not want to see the hatred or those that have been affected by it,
boring into mine with chisels and hammers, love the chisels and hammers and sculptors of despair
sculptors of despair, with nothing to weep for.


I am but a man,
do not let me feel Death,
his skull grinning as he devours,
taking those who have done all wrong,
those who have never seen the light of day,
consuming all, with nothing beyond his reach.


I am but a man,
do not let me see the darkness,
do not let me lose the dying light,
I am but a man.