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The Fourth Stooge

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06-03-2016, 03:53 PM

Sway with gentle sea breeze. --- this line spoils it for me because of the 'gentle sea breeze'. It's best to avoid adjectives in poetry, particularly hackneyed ones like 'gentle'.

~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe

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Echo - by PoetCraft - 06-03-2016, 01:39 PM

RE: Echo - by shemthepenman - 06-03-2016, 03:25 PM

RE: Echo - by PoetCraft - 06-03-2016, 03:51 PM

RE: Echo - by Achebe - 06-03-2016, 03:53 PM

RE: Echo - by PoetCraft - 06-03-2016, 04:02 PM

RE: Echo - by Achebe - 06-03-2016, 04:31 PM

RE: Echo - by shemthepenman - 06-03-2016, 05:18 PM

RE: Echo - by Todd - 06-04-2016, 01:24 AM

RE: Echo - by PoetCraft - 06-05-2016, 01:23 AM

RE: Echo - by amejadcc - 07-28-2016, 06:46 PM

RE: Echo - by RiverNotch - 07-29-2016, 12:11 AM

RE: Echo - by bluegypsea - 08-01-2016, 06:54 AM

RE: Echo - by Wex - 08-04-2016, 07:36 AM

RE: Echo - by billy - 08-04-2016, 11:24 AM

RE: Echo - by GordonBillett - 08-05-2016, 10:06 AM

RE: Echo - by sapril - 08-05-2016, 02:07 PM

RE: Echo - by poet-rice - 08-06-2016, 08:44 AM

RE: Echo - by maximuswolf - 08-07-2016, 12:38 PM

RE: Echo - by dared - 08-15-2016, 11:50 AM

RE: Echo - by Erthona - 08-16-2016, 03:35 PM

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