06-02-2016, 08:53 AM
I really love this 
At the beginning, I'm expecting Uncle George to tell a story or share a bit of wisdom. Then it seems like you're setting up a joke. The ending seems to come out of nowhere, yet looking back the signs were there I just wasn't paying attention. I like that you led the reader on the same journey as the narrator. And the title change was perfect.
At the beginning, I'm expecting Uncle George to tell a story or share a bit of wisdom. Then it seems like you're setting up a joke. The ending seems to come out of nowhere, yet looking back the signs were there I just wasn't paying attention. I like that you led the reader on the same journey as the narrator. And the title change was perfect.