05-30-2016, 12:54 AM
I have to agree with "justcloudy." I really like the original because it was, well...original. It made me laugh and the revision didn't -- I found the revised version forgettable. I think that there's a fresh perspective and voice in your work and I would hate for that to be lost.
I would much prefer to read something new than something tidy.
I would much prefer to read something new than something tidy.

