A River in Minnesota

[QDeathstar]

I disagree somewhat with the previous crit. I think the lines flow like a river, even if there is nothing concrete to hang onto. It still creates a scene. The problem for me is that you aren't consistent enough to pull it off. Eg, for most of the poem you are consistent in specifics, but then to open stanza two, you start with a generic statement about small animals. Wasted line. Also, the "All of it." detracts from the poem as I see it. Its too finite for a flowing river. Its like a damn dam.