05-28-2016, 11:49 PM
Hi Kolemath,
I've had another thought about this and the use of white space and punctuation. I agree with Lizzie and her reading of caffeine being the substance that pulls the world together and makes it possible, and the white space and overall structure of sentences present this well. If this idea is more what you were going for then I would suggest a title change. I was very much led by the title and therefore had certain expectations before I really got into reading the poem.
The narrator may indeed be drinking 'Too Much Coffee' but the overall feeling of the poem doesn't express this.
Just a thought,
Mark
I've had another thought about this and the use of white space and punctuation. I agree with Lizzie and her reading of caffeine being the substance that pulls the world together and makes it possible, and the white space and overall structure of sentences present this well. If this idea is more what you were going for then I would suggest a title change. I was very much led by the title and therefore had certain expectations before I really got into reading the poem.
The narrator may indeed be drinking 'Too Much Coffee' but the overall feeling of the poem doesn't express this.
Just a thought,
Mark
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