05-27-2016, 05:12 AM
(I hope I'm posting this edit correctly). I tried to clean up the metaphor, compress concepts, and reorganize stanzas. [b]Thanks to everyone for the input! [/b]
Edit 1
Name Train Tracks
Born and staked a name
pounded on the brain
the sound of John or Jane
cuffing the rhythm to claim
This is your name!
This is your name!
This is your name!
If John were Joe or Jan were Jane,
the tracks would lead the same?
Bob the builder
hammers houses in Houston.
But Cletus the theologian? No.
Should have named him Theodore.
Dig up the pseudonym,
the tracks the name has set.
Map a distant station,
the naming of the self.
Edit 1
Name Train Tracks
Born and staked a name
pounded on the brain
the sound of John or Jane
cuffing the rhythm to claim
This is your name!
This is your name!
This is your name!
If John were Joe or Jan were Jane,
the tracks would lead the same?
Bob the builder
hammers houses in Houston.
But Cletus the theologian? No.
Should have named him Theodore.
Dig up the pseudonym,
the tracks the name has set.
Map a distant station,
the naming of the self.