05-26-2016, 07:39 PM
Hi Rogo - a pun works only if both meanings make sense. I get what you were trying to do, but just as 'a den of sleeves' cannot be a pun on 'den of thieves', neither does it work in your poem.
A litany of woes is a song / dirge of complaints. You can have a litany of sorrows, a litany that's prose, a litany about your nose, and one that no one knows, but not one of throws!
A litany of woes is a song / dirge of complaints. You can have a litany of sorrows, a litany that's prose, a litany about your nose, and one that no one knows, but not one of throws!
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe