rotting

[Cousin Kil]

edit 

The crack in her ancient voice
repeats, dully echoing in the hollow Now that the voice has a place to go/echo, I like its presence in the poem a lot more.
of her trunk, blanketed in soft green.
Her dents cave in, subsiding
into holes and heaps of mush. After reading crits, I'm caught now between the idea of her being a tree or an elephant. The indication of decomposition in "mush" makes me want to say elephant. But I don't know
Crumbles gather in the dips;
microbes clamber through the litter.
She was once an upright bastion,
proud of all whom she gave life to. And this part makes me want to say tree. This is kind of a cool idea-- a tree as the mother figure, a central source of sustenance to its biome. The only downfall is this also makes me think of Disney's Pocahontas. Maybe that's a good thing though... I guess that really relies on what you want people to conjure up in their heads when reading your piece.
Now millions, just born, crawl through Still dig this. Also I like the new addition of the previous line. It connects to this one quite well.
her splayed and broken corpse.

I like this poem a lot more now. Part of that is because I realized how wrong my initial interpretation was (after reading other crits of course). I think you've done very well in your edit. A few notes above.

Also it's still a little ambiguous to me as to which thing you're describing. And maybe thats just me, I mean my first interpretation was pretty off. Perhaps it doesn't matter what a person reads the thing to be, whether elephant or tree(?) Maybe what matters is that idea of rotting and how the mother figure still gives life to the forest even in her dying. It depends on what you want out of the poem. And we'll see if it's totally obvious to others/if I'm just daft today.

I would say maybe a few other key words like "tusk" or "skull" would point to the mother being an animal/elephant. And maybe the lack there of says that you want a tree there. So for now I'm thinking tree.

I wouldn't know where to incorporate "tusk" or "skull" into the poem anyways. I really like this nugget how it is. Some might say it's golden.