05-21-2016, 02:59 PM
(05-20-2016, 06:44 AM)justcloudy Wrote: The crack in her ancient voiceI like how it could be both a human corpse, or a fallen tree.
repeats, echoing in the hollow
of her trunk, blanketed in soft green.
Her dents cave in, collapsing.
Crumbles gather in the cracks; cracks seems too sharp a word a word for a rotting corpse/tree. It would be softer and mushier in my opinion.
microbes clamber through the litter.
She was once an upright bastion,
now millions crawl through
her splayed and broken corpse.
It might just be me, but this poem sort of made me smile. Is this rotting really a bad thing? Now there are millions of living creatures here, it's more alive than ever!
Hell, the rotting corpse/tree is blanketed in soft green - sounds peaceful enough to me.
If this upbeat interpretation was your intention, you might want to add a few more hints to make it a little clearer. If not, it doesn't matter, because I like my interpretation of the poem.

