rotting

[Achebe]

Hi JC - I quite like this poem. My only discomfort is with 'echo' followed by 'blanketed' - acoustically unlikely. I think adding in a 'dully' or 'muffled' might help resolve that issue.

Edit: perhaps another one: the present continuous in 'collapsing' is confusing as it gives the impression of 'cave in' being an action happening at the present moment. Suggest 'where collapsed' or 'collapsed' or 'have caved in'