05-13-2016, 07:38 AM
Hi Ella,
I keep reading this. I was trying to find something helpful to say, so that I would have an excuse to tell you how much I like it. I finally gave up and am just telling you anyway. I especially like:
"her face is blank. Her empty arms are lithe
but though her husband's near he sees no wife.
Her head hangs low, in floods the first to drown.
Her part is set."
and,
"She has the strength to turn the world her way,
above the city's spikes her will holds sway.
She makes the scene her own and plants her feet,"
and,
"Her husband revels in her grin"
Also, it really helped me understand the poem to have the names there for reference. Without, I don't know that I would have quite seen it the same way. At first read I must admit, I thought she was happily floating around. ;P
Anyway, that's all. Loved it.
--Quix
I keep reading this. I was trying to find something helpful to say, so that I would have an excuse to tell you how much I like it. I finally gave up and am just telling you anyway. I especially like:
"her face is blank. Her empty arms are lithe
but though her husband's near he sees no wife.
Her head hangs low, in floods the first to drown.
Her part is set."
and,
"She has the strength to turn the world her way,
above the city's spikes her will holds sway.
She makes the scene her own and plants her feet,"
and,
"Her husband revels in her grin"
Also, it really helped me understand the poem to have the names there for reference. Without, I don't know that I would have quite seen it the same way. At first read I must admit, I thought she was happily floating around. ;P
Anyway, that's all. Loved it.
--Quix
The Soufflé isn’t the soufflé; the soufflé is the recipe. --Clara