05-13-2016, 06:23 AM
Loved the first two lines.
Not so much:
Adjectives: Breathless, endless
Hyperbole: isn't Rabbit River in Michigan? Wikipedia. It's anything but endless summer there come winter! Unless the endless summer was a metaphor, not to be taken literally....which again weakens the metaphor. Unless this is a different Rabbit River.
If Michigan, didn't get the point about buffalo venturing this far. Didn't they sort of venture much further anyway?
Meadow beasts for Buffaloes again? Meadow beasts sounds almost comically Miltonic to me. Maybe it's just me.
Life still feeds on sunlight
Filled with despair?
Th contrast isn't so vivid. The grunts of meadow beasts and the sleepy lives of Midwestern farmers. Not so terrible the second. If it is, the poem doesn't ring it out.
Pardon the typos. Phone typing.
Not so much:
Adjectives: Breathless, endless
Hyperbole: isn't Rabbit River in Michigan? Wikipedia. It's anything but endless summer there come winter! Unless the endless summer was a metaphor, not to be taken literally....which again weakens the metaphor. Unless this is a different Rabbit River.
If Michigan, didn't get the point about buffalo venturing this far. Didn't they sort of venture much further anyway?
Meadow beasts for Buffaloes again? Meadow beasts sounds almost comically Miltonic to me. Maybe it's just me.
Life still feeds on sunlight
Filled with despair?
Th contrast isn't so vivid. The grunts of meadow beasts and the sleepy lives of Midwestern farmers. Not so terrible the second. If it is, the poem doesn't ring it out.
Pardon the typos. Phone typing.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe