04-14-2016, 06:39 PM
I can't link the title to the poem. I suspect there is a meaning somewhere, but the poem doesn't interest me enough to think about the connection.
There is a single image in the poem - 'wisteria falls to the ground / heavy in rain / and voices sounding from the television' - and it is here that the poem has some interest for the reader. I suppose you are describing a day in the life of somebody suffering from Graves disease, but there's too little detail given for the reader to be hooked.
'tremors and anxiety consume colours' is an overly stretched metaphor. For a metaphor to work, it should ideally make literal as well as metaphorical sense.
There is a single image in the poem - 'wisteria falls to the ground / heavy in rain / and voices sounding from the television' - and it is here that the poem has some interest for the reader. I suppose you are describing a day in the life of somebody suffering from Graves disease, but there's too little detail given for the reader to be hooked.
'tremors and anxiety consume colours' is an overly stretched metaphor. For a metaphor to work, it should ideally make literal as well as metaphorical sense.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe