04-11-2016, 07:46 AM
Okay so everything was going decent until I reached "we are riding on the back of....". I think you should revisit that part of your poem.
As a whole however, I do see the message of possible betrayal, or something was taken away from you. Also something defeated and seeks forgiveness?
A little too abstract for my taste, but it does have its high points.
As a whole however, I do see the message of possible betrayal, or something was taken away from you. Also something defeated and seeks forgiveness?
A little too abstract for my taste, but it does have its high points.