Cleaning Out My Desk (V3 - Title Change)

[milo]

This reads more like a diatribe than a poem. In fact, it reads only like a diatribe and not like a poem at all, so, while I am hesitant to get in to the "this is a poem/this isn't a poem debate" I am dependent on the author to distinguish the difference between the two. As for improvement? Well, instead of telling your readers the what's and whys, you could write a poem that demonstrates them and let your readers form their own conclusions.

Good luck.
Thanks for posting.