American Beauties

[71degrees]

Poem is sharp as a tack and I wouldn't add much, except for one teeny tiny thing that I think may be something that can benefit it (it's entirely up to you but this is merely a suggestion, what I'd do).

There is a subtle contradiction. If you're going to say "the city we lived in" it seems like you intend for it to be a faceless city, a place of many places, yet after that you mention the east side, which is contradictory and plants me down, as the reader, in a real place that I can picture clearly, which is a tad jolting. A suggestion would be to just simply say "New York" instead of "the city we lived in", or instead be a bit less obvious when you mention the east side at L4 and instead say something else.

Or the "east side" could be the east side of the apartment. Sun side Thanks for looking. Not sure what to call you.