04-03-2016, 01:35 PM
(04-03-2016, 01:42 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Two by TwoThis is great, Paul. Would love to see it reworked when the month is over, with a wee change to the refrain. Because it's a trochee, board would work better than boarded. The tense shift shouldn't matter.
Two by two we boarded the ark;
a safe-house built of Gopher wood.
I looked for you, but it was dark
and time was short; we’d soon embark
for promised, safer neighbourhoods.
Two by two we boarded. The ark
was huge but housed no germ, no shark—
we left them where the sinners stood.
I looked for you, but it was dark
and there were howls and growls and barks
at clouds above, engorged with blood.
Two by two we boarded the ark
and prayed a coloured bow would arc
beyond the borders of the flood.
I looked for you… but it was dark
and God had long since set his mark
and then He saw that it was good.
Two by two we boarded the ark
I looked for you, but it was dark.
It could be worse
