The Honey Mimics (3700 words)

[billy]

hi king. me too, i saw something in there but lost it and my breath.
the lines between verses worked well enough as a poem on their own but in general the poem buried me.
i know this is serious and i should give some cohesive feedback but i need a stiff drink after this read. it's has potential but i'm not capable of showing you where it is good to see you posting, i'll do better next time