03-31-2016, 02:15 AM
(03-31-2016, 01:48 AM)Acephale Wrote: Ouch, I didn't think ti was that bad, though I don't disagree with anyone else's comments. What were you thinking about when you wrote this? It seems to lack direction more than anything else.
(03-31-2016, 02:05 AM)1skylande1 Wrote: to me, the first two stanzas are good. You need to work on the third stanza because it is somewhat....chunky.Hey, folks, this is a critique forum, please try to give a little more and to be a little more specific, give the OP something he can use. thanks, ella
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