Who Am I?

[Lip Kingdavid]

I play both roles.
   I am death and dark,
   I am life and light,

I like this stanza, especially the alliteration. The first line leaves me wanting a bit more, I'm not sure why. Maybe the language is a bit basic compared to the tone the poem carries?

I burn, I build, I blind,
   I clarify, I am doubt,
   I burst with courage,

This one is a bit weaker. I'm not sure what the pattern of the first line is trying to get across. Burn, build and blind don't exactly correlate to each other in that order. It almost seems like you chose three B words, which is fine, but I think there are better waords in a better order you could use. The last line is a bit confusing to me as well. It doesn't seem to mesh with anything else and is a bit of a loner.

I call you ugly, I kiss you
   goodnight, I lie to
   myself, I love myself,
   I bury myself, but I
   rise as well.

I'm not a fan of the first half of this stanza. It's a bit cluttered and doesn't have a discernible flow to it. There doesn't seem to be any reason that it's broken up the way it is.  I love the ending though. Very strong. It's a good pause from the flow and tone of the rest of the poem. The last line is a heck of a lot better than the rest of the work, which is both good and bad news.