Ten Years After the Big Game

[Keith]

Ten Years After the Big Game


Last night, I wore a miniskirt Not sure you need "last night"
to the reunion
instead of my helmet.

The teams were the same:
girls with Venus legs flytrap shut; like this image alot, reunions are funny things, we all seem to regress to our former selves.
boys chasing tail
so no one thinks they like ass. this works well and adds weight to the theme
But I had switched sides.

Coach saw my nicked-up knees
and lead the offensive.
But you can’t unring the bell, I would keep the extended metaphor "restart the first quarter" something like that
or unscrew the girl,
so I beat him to the punch again maybe "tackle"
and gulped a big glass of fuck you:
my square jaw set;
my Adam’s apple bobbing like this whole section..... some things define us, well visually of course
like a minor toady. not sure of toady, although it fits perfectly it just sounds ugly, it could just be me but I wanted something smoother " I re-wrote his play book" thats crap but you can see what I mean
It was a bravura performance:
not a side-eye in the house.

Ten years after the big game, they all know
I can’t pass like I used to.
But I can strut. Nice ending and image. conveys a sense of pride, which I like

Really enjoyed this Nester, it has strong sense of pride and passion about facing difficult situations I also like the extended metaphor not sure about the switch from football to boxing but it still works if you choose to keep it. I made some comment and suggestions to be taken or not. Thanks for the read. Keith