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Embers 2.0
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03-28-2016, 03:32 PM
Just wanted to alert you to a typo, "receeds" should be "recedes." I really like this poem; I enjoyed your imagery and this gave me an interesting mental image. A minor suggestion to your last line is that saying "one by one" instead of "one at a time" may sound smoother, but that's an author's choice. I think this piece is original and strong, nice job!
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Embers 2.0 - by Mattp - 03-26-2016, 12:04 PM
RE: Embers 2.0 - by Nester - 03-26-2016, 09:12 PM
RE: Embers 2.0 - by Mattp - 03-27-2016, 03:21 AM
RE: Embers 2.0 - by sithcat - 03-28-2016, 11:31 AM
RE: Embers 2.0 - by Jasper - 03-28-2016, 03:32 PM
RE: Embers 2.0 - by Mattp - 03-29-2016, 11:16 AM
RE: Embers 2.0 - by whatisay-whatifeel - 03-31-2016, 01:24 PM
RE: Embers 2.0 - by Mattp - 04-02-2016, 08:03 AM
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