I don't know

[Matthew McKeown]

I liked this poem very much, however it is a bit clunky in its reading. Sometimes a poet may want to avoid long sentences. The results may be that we edit our thoughts to the poems detriment. I would suggest re-thinking the use of longer more complete thoughts in your stanzas. 

Thanks, Matt 

I don’t know how to tell you this.
You, the embodiment of cuteness,
With smile, you crumble the darkness,
With care, you can melt even the north pole.


I don’t know how to tell you this.
I have been loving you since we met.
It is wrong, they said.
She has a boyfriend, they opposed.


I don’t know how to tell you this.
I envy the guy you love.
Just be him for one day, I wish.
To hold you tightly, to be loved by you.


I don’t know how to tell you this.
Impossible, unfeasible, I notice.
Like two poles of magnet, we attracted.
Like oil and water, we can’t mix.


I know how to tell you this.
I love you with all my heart.
I care for you with all my feeling.
I truly wish the world for you.