03-25-2016, 03:45 AM
Yeah, it is definitely forced. You have confirmed what I thought about it all along. I don't write very good poetry but I will continue to try until I do. I had never attempted to write rhyming poetry until I found this site and I find it to be difficult. I want to learn and grow. I want to write well. If something is horseshit then I need to hear it. I appreciate your honesty.
The title is the most interesting thing in this poem. It makes me want to love the poem. But, the rest sounds a like leftovers of a teenage poetry meet. Not a lot said, some pretty common pretty words, and the usual small talk about the weather.
Keep the title, ditch the poem.
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The title is the most interesting thing in this poem. It makes me want to love the poem. But, the rest sounds a like leftovers of a teenage poetry meet. Not a lot said, some pretty common pretty words, and the usual small talk about the weather.
Keep the title, ditch the poem.
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