03-22-2016, 02:52 PM
Adoran wrote: " However, I don't really understand what you mean by: " but the sestet should start where the word "last", perhaps you mean the volta she start at the end of the L9?"
Sorry about that, I did not write that very clearly. What I meant was in terms of the rhyme the sestet would start where the word "last?" currently resides, so that L9 would rhyme with L10. Currently L9 doesn't really rhyme with anything or at best is a slant rhyme to the b rhyme of the abba abba section, i.e. backs->last. When it should be rhyming with "sunlight." So I was simply referring to the rhyme pattern not following the standard form and I simply wrote it poorly. Although there are variation, the rhyme scheme that best fits this poem if it is a Petrachan sonnet would be the standard abba abba ccddcd.
dale
Sorry about that, I did not write that very clearly. What I meant was in terms of the rhyme the sestet would start where the word "last?" currently resides, so that L9 would rhyme with L10. Currently L9 doesn't really rhyme with anything or at best is a slant rhyme to the b rhyme of the abba abba section, i.e. backs->last. When it should be rhyming with "sunlight." So I was simply referring to the rhyme pattern not following the standard form and I simply wrote it poorly. Although there are variation, the rhyme scheme that best fits this poem if it is a Petrachan sonnet would be the standard abba abba ccddcd.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.