A Raindrop Landed In My Eye
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this is cool but it feels sort of like you hit enter a lot on a piece of prose to make it sound deeper, but it just makes it feel flatter than the work as a story.  I love birds though keep at it with the bird stuff
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A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by mackzmike - 03-01-2016, 07:12 AM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by ellajam - 03-01-2016, 07:18 AM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by mackzmike - 03-01-2016, 07:49 AM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by Achebe - 03-01-2016, 07:12 PM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by REW - 03-03-2016, 04:12 AM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by REW - 03-06-2016, 11:03 AM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by ephemerald - 03-08-2016, 05:19 PM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by jameso - 03-11-2016, 09:31 AM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by actual_trash - 03-11-2016, 12:42 PM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by Ashok1 - 03-12-2016, 12:58 AM
RE: A Raindrop Landed In My Eye - by Enrique34 - 03-17-2016, 04:13 AM



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