03-11-2016, 09:31 AM
I also like this idea, that we connect with a seagull, projecting our own understanding of the world onto it. then it is broken with an act of animal depravity, then you get rained on. mildly cynical and humourour.
is there any reason why this line separates into two?:
my eye lids
shut.
im not sure what you were going for but for me it doesn't really add poetic gravitas or rhythm having shut on a separate line
is there any reason why this line separates into two?:
my eye lids
shut.
im not sure what you were going for but for me it doesn't really add poetic gravitas or rhythm having shut on a separate line