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Can you please show me where i wasn't specific, in one poem please? I am usually always specific. I am going to review every critique I gave. I don't see how my critique was not specific enough. each line I critiqued I gave on them I suggested. I even complimented before I started. On my poem "fathers ghost" there are people going right to negative giving very heavy negative critique with smug attitudes and their critiques were allowed to go through. one say "means nothing" and the other say "just because you read poetry.."  Yet I am being told my critique almost did not go through, although their critique is pure negative.  I removed my poems because the critique were so unethical and not supported without any suggestions for improvements, other than punctuation. I posted in mild critique. That's what I gave. I was not trying to go line by line all the way down, that would be heavy critique.  What do you mean by get through?

Hi, Victoria, I was referring to the post below, your first. I've put the parts that seemed to be general advice in bold. Both critiques you followed up with were much more helpful and specific to the poem. Thank you for that.

EDIT: Oh, and by "got through" I meant that as it states in our welcome letter, the first three critiques are moderated. Once three are approved the registrant becomes a full member can post as they like freely and start their own threads.

My bold.

Hi I am new here.  Your imagery is quite lovely and I really enjoyed them.
I only feel a problem in the focus on subject.

I am going to give you some tips, that I recently got out of a practice of poetry book.
Poem begin where you enter a conversation, where the conversations is continued on your end.

My critique:
I personally feel your poem is two poems.
There is a really beautiful poem beginning at the word "while"
Every stanza after, would work well starting with the word "while"

Here are 3 tips that really helped me over this year

1. What ever your subject matter is, in the first stanza, you must comitt to it.
All else in the poem must support it.

2. Poems begin where you enter in a conversation.
you can imagine having a conversation with someone
and then what would you say, in reply on the subject that you are discussing.

3. It is easier often, to write your poem as a letter or prose first.
You free write it, being very descriptive.
Then you create a poem from the content in the letter.
This keeps you from ruining your natural turns in the poem within
I have started writing all my poem like this. I feel less frustrated.
Emily Dickinson used contend from her letters, and so did Ann Exton

4. a poem will chose its form.

Feel free to pass this information on:0)