02-25-2016, 01:21 AM
Paul,
I am thinking if you you want to lengthen it, it should be before the last line. The last line is a pretty definite ending; anything else after it seems like a forced after thought. Three lines do not a senryu make. Plus this is more of an allusion than a human foible. I mean in that sense, Walter Mitty's entire character is a weakness
dale
I am thinking if you you want to lengthen it, it should be before the last line. The last line is a pretty definite ending; anything else after it seems like a forced after thought. Three lines do not a senryu make. Plus this is more of an allusion than a human foible. I mean in that sense, Walter Mitty's entire character is a weakness
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.