02-21-2016, 05:52 AM
Thanks RN,
Actually "slanted" is there because the scene I was describing was a chalk drawing on the slanted part of the driveway. After putting it in I liked it as it gave motion to the scene within the mind of the reader, or at least it could, as the rain drops washed away the chalk it would run downward, so it leaves that implied image without having to actually say it. I also like the feel of a flat, rigid inclined plane as opposed to a slope. It juxtaposes along with the hardness of the concrete of the driveway itself against the softness of chalk. However, I would never put in an extra word simply for line length. Well, maybe in metered poetry.
Thanks for your comments, always appreciated,
dale
Actually "slanted" is there because the scene I was describing was a chalk drawing on the slanted part of the driveway. After putting it in I liked it as it gave motion to the scene within the mind of the reader, or at least it could, as the rain drops washed away the chalk it would run downward, so it leaves that implied image without having to actually say it. I also like the feel of a flat, rigid inclined plane as opposed to a slope. It juxtaposes along with the hardness of the concrete of the driveway itself against the softness of chalk. However, I would never put in an extra word simply for line length. Well, maybe in metered poetry.
Thanks for your comments, always appreciated,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.