Impatience
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(02-21-2016, 01:24 AM)RiverNotch Wrote:  IMPATIENCE

Oh! that I should die today,
and leave my sins behind --
and leave the Jacob's ladder,
the holy mount, unclimbed?
I know I shall not die a saint --
the summit fails my pride.
But I shall die a champion still,
and leave a will unsigned!
Hey River. I like this but a few questions... "THE Jacob's ladder" sounds wrong. Also, I can't really reconcile the question mark after "unclimbed". But I like it regardless. Lastly, I keep wondering if "the summit" should be "that summit" since by my read "saint" defines the summit. Really like unclimbed/unsigned.

Paul
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Messages In This Thread
Impatience - by RiverNotch - 02-21-2016, 01:24 AM
RE: Impatience - by Achebe - 02-21-2016, 02:00 AM
RE: Impatience - by Tiger the Lion - 02-21-2016, 02:13 AM
RE: Impatience - by RiverNotch - 02-21-2016, 09:06 PM
RE: Impatience - by Magpie - 02-21-2016, 09:45 PM
RE: Impatience - by Erthona - 02-22-2016, 12:53 AM
RE: Impatience - by just mercedes - 02-22-2016, 08:04 AM
RE: Impatience - by RiverNotch - 02-25-2016, 05:47 PM
RE: Impatience - by Magpie - 02-26-2016, 12:31 AM



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