02-20-2016, 08:44 PM
Perhaps it's just a matter of preference, but I felt unsettled by the disjointed rhyme scheme. I would have felt more settled and therefore able to better absorb the message in the poem if it had been written in rhyming couplets or, alternatively, entirely in free verse without the patchy rhyming scheme. I certainly feel you have successfully created an air of "being led by the nose" in a direction you feel you should resist, but probably have little choice. Well done for that.