My first poem-Plz help

[billy]

hi grim. not bad for a 1st poem. if it needs a pre poem explanation then it needs an edit so it doesn't need an explanation.title the the thing, even if it's a place holding title. i notice you say ipod...it should be ipad, but if you did it on purpose i could be quite clever. some of the rhymes feels forced and expected. anyone can put ing on the end of a word to make it rhyme. watch out for unwarranted repetition

This was done for my creative writing class on the topic of the transcendentalist ideology from a modern Pov
“I feel this attempt at a poem needs a little pre-poem explanation I took the main transcendentalist-ish tenant in my life which i don’t compromise and even that thought can be easily lost in depression or our daily troubles I feel this poem summarizes that tenant and my hope that my generation follows this and chases  their dreams[b](although these dreams may be constantly changing) for their future simply not stopping until that is achieved even if that dream is too smile, along with that this poem symbolizes the disappoint I see in those who have compromised their Beliefs for those of  others or simply fearing their own capabilities.”[/b]


“This poem is a warning and fear about compromise”
If life is an iPod
Is it fair to say we’ve left our life’s on shuffle lives
But here's the trouble
I think it's somehow worse
Some of us have simply accepted
In our feeling thoughts hopelessly inflected
That our dreams everyday are shrinking
That perhaps  we’ve done too much rethinking
That thought that when our eyeballs quit blinking eyeballs don't blink
Will we even find all we were seeking
or will they find  us in our cubicles still reeking
As a kid I propose, If life is an a iPod that by compromising
That maybe we aren’t even playing a song at all we’ve picked,
perhaps we've defaulted Instead
Losing ideals our lives our thoughts our head
We’ve just left the thing we’ve fled
Ignoring the problems taking the med
Disregarding our hopes as they’ve hopelessly bleed
Huh there is a lot to be said but
With all this dread 
Even youtube is starting to look a little red




I'm seeking general help on the revision of this poem as i know very little  about poetry and feel this is probably pretty rough along with an title