An End

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To live hard is to die hard - I feel like you're quoting Bruce Willis or summit.
And you fucking charged - I do not know what this means in the context of this poem.
There was no knot left untied - Now you're just saying words.
No fruit that wasn't juiced - I don't mind this line. I think you could run with this theme alone. 
No bottle left unpunished - Now we're in a Gatorade commercial.
and no spark unused

How many fifths we emptied
Parties we fucked up
Long winter nights of destruction
As Canadian Hunter filled our cups
Roses are flowers, but opium too - This is good.
You smelled all you could but couldn't see it through 

Erica my friend it's hard to smile - Commas?
But you would cry if we were doing anything but that
So we will try to look up
See past the clouds to the sunny blue
You took everything you could from life
So life took everything from you

Your poem became sentimental towards the end though you wouldn't expect it reading the first stanza. This reads like an unrung towel. You've got some water to squeeze. Thanks for the post shugaree.

-News

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To live hard is to die hard - I feel like you're quoting Bruce Willis or summit.
And you fucking charged - I do not know what this means in the context of this poem.
There was no knot left untied - Now you're just saying words.
No fruit that wasn't juiced - I don't mind this line. I think you could run with this theme alone. 
No bottle left unpunished - Now we're in a Gatorade commercial.
and no spark unused

How many fifths we emptied
Parties we fucked up
Long winter nights of destruction
As Canadian Hunter filled our cups
Roses are flowers, but opium too - This is good.
You smelled all you could but couldn't see it through 

Erica my friend it's hard to smile - Commas?
But you would cry if we were doing anything but that
So we will try to look up
See past the clouds to the sunny blue
You took everything you could from life
So life took everything from you

Your poem became sentimental towards the end though you wouldn't expect it reading the first stanza. This reads like an unrung towel. You've got some water to squeeze. Thanks for the post shugaree.

-News

Also you could commit to some punctuation. And you don't need to capitalize the beginning of every line. I feel like we do that now to satirize. 

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