An End

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey shur, a common theme but could be easily tightened. Some personal thoughts below>

To live hard is to die hard will remind readers of a movie. Do you need this line?
And you fucking charged
There was no knot left untied
No fruit that wasn't juiced
No bottle left unpunished I like "unpunished"
and no spark unused

How many fifths we emptied
Parties we fucked up did you fuck up the parties or get fucked up at the parties? meaning before rhyme
Long winter nights of destruction
As Canadian Hunter filled our cups specifics are good 
Roses are flowers, but opium too nope! roses are red... and everyone reads it that way
You smelled all you could but couldn't see it through

Erica my friend it's hard to smile (while all the birds are singing...) careful again where the reader's mind may go
But you would cry if we were doing anything but that
So we will try to look up
See past the clouds to the sunny blue
You took everything you could from life
So life took everything from you

That's a lot said for novice but I kinda liked it and there's my 2 cents.

Paul