01-29-2016, 09:04 PM
Thank you all for showing such interest in my poem. Some people have not realised that this is an attempt at a sonnet so suggestions concerning line or poem length etc. would "buckle the framework" that I have used.
The people who have realised that it is an attempt to write a sonnet have made some valid and useful points and, although the changes might seem minor, I have to agree that a rewrite is something I should do to tidy it up.
I accept, apart from the sonnet framework, it can be considered lacking in some other poetic aspects. It is, in its own way, a plain and sincere reply to a question asked at breakfast. I think, under the circumstances, I shall leave the final version much the same in concept.
The people who have realised that it is an attempt to write a sonnet have made some valid and useful points and, although the changes might seem minor, I have to agree that a rewrite is something I should do to tidy it up.
I accept, apart from the sonnet framework, it can be considered lacking in some other poetic aspects. It is, in its own way, a plain and sincere reply to a question asked at breakfast. I think, under the circumstances, I shall leave the final version much the same in concept.