People spotting

[Keith]

I like the contrast between the 'beige' and the 'polished brass' - I live above a small railway station, and each time they run the old steam trains I thrill to the sound of the whistles, and the chuff-chuff-chuff of the engines, which take me on journeys like yours.
http://www.steaminc.org.nz/

what a fantastic place to live, I'm jealous. I can remember standing outside school watching the Flying Scotsman power past, I was hugely impressed by the raw power.

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The first thing that came to mind when I read the title was Robert Palmer's "Simply Irresistible". I don't know if that is because I am dyslexic, or if others would also make the the connection. Anyway, I had the song running through my mind as I tried to read the poem, not to mention those weird looking women he always had in his videos (or so it seemed to me). Sp maybe a consideration of a title change. Regardless of that possible connection it seems awkward compared to the elegance of the poem. I enjoyed the rhythmic quality and the internal rhyme help this along. I could have stood for more of a setting, especially in terms of the speaker as this caused some confusion and even after several readings the confusion remained. My proclivities aside, this was a very streamlined rail-rider that anyone from a hobo to elites of Art Nouveau could appreciate.

Best,

dale

Ha, I do that with titles as well, I changed the title from Steam Trains, to try and hint that this poem is about peoples characters rather than trains but it doesn't seem to come across at all so will have to have a rethink maybe more of a set up is required, thanks Dale.