01-27-2016, 06:44 AM
I'm unsure why you have different lines for the echo of a faucet's drip and just a regular ole' faucet's drip. Is there something special about the echo that distinguishes it from the sound a regular drip makes? Why does the echo bring order but the non-echo drip distracts people?
I understand that you're playing around with the wording, but there doesn't seem to be any reason for it in the poem. To me, a routine is doing the same thing over and over, not different things every time.
I do like the theme of the poem, I especially like the imagery at the end of a prisoner writing this very poem to keep himself sane. In that sense, I think this is a good job - just needs work around the edges.
-BW
I understand that you're playing around with the wording, but there doesn't seem to be any reason for it in the poem. To me, a routine is doing the same thing over and over, not different things every time.
I do like the theme of the poem, I especially like the imagery at the end of a prisoner writing this very poem to keep himself sane. In that sense, I think this is a good job - just needs work around the edges.
-BW