01-26-2016, 04:43 PM
Julius,
Thanks for the feedback. My intention with this piece was i guess to express my thoughts on everyday life in jail. Its a chaotic environment, yet somehow there's order. Theres also control. I'll take your ideas into consideration when i revise, thanks again.
Tiger the Lion
Thanks for the feedback, ill definitely keep working at it!
Erthona,
I appreciate the change in viewpoint, its always refreshing to see. I like what you did with most all the lines too ha. But your upbringing sounds similar to mine, my then-18 year old sister used to go to Black Baptist where my mom would take us to Catholic. I was very shocked the first time my sister took me to her church, but i never wanted to go to that boring Catholic mass again (until i found out that most Baptist sermons are about 2-3hrs in length haha)! But ive never heard of Brother Longmire, ill youtube him tho hehe. Thanks again for the feedback,
Mike
Thanks for the feedback. My intention with this piece was i guess to express my thoughts on everyday life in jail. Its a chaotic environment, yet somehow there's order. Theres also control. I'll take your ideas into consideration when i revise, thanks again.
Tiger the Lion
Thanks for the feedback, ill definitely keep working at it!
Erthona,
I appreciate the change in viewpoint, its always refreshing to see. I like what you did with most all the lines too ha. But your upbringing sounds similar to mine, my then-18 year old sister used to go to Black Baptist where my mom would take us to Catholic. I was very shocked the first time my sister took me to her church, but i never wanted to go to that boring Catholic mass again (until i found out that most Baptist sermons are about 2-3hrs in length haha)! But ive never heard of Brother Longmire, ill youtube him tho hehe. Thanks again for the feedback,
Mike
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