01-22-2016, 03:41 AM
This is an aphorism, or an apothegm if one prefers, not a poem. Even were it a poem, there are problems with it.
"The immeasurable depth of the fragile mind,
Is only limited by the shallowness of mankind."
What is the difference between "The immeasurable depth of the fragile mind" and "The fragile mind"?
edit:
fragile human mind
limited by shallowness
of mankind
Of course since what we call "mankind" is based on on the mind of the aggregate of humans, it shows the statement to be a logical fallacy.
Try observing something concrete, not abstract. Try seeing it in a different way than people usually see it, then try writing about that. If you can throw in a metaphor for good measure. Also try reading more (some) poetry, immerse yourself in it. If the talent is there the poems will come.
Welcome to the site,
Best,
dale
"The immeasurable depth of the fragile mind,
Is only limited by the shallowness of mankind."
What is the difference between "The immeasurable depth of the fragile mind" and "The fragile mind"?
edit:
fragile human mind
limited by shallowness
of mankind
Of course since what we call "mankind" is based on on the mind of the aggregate of humans, it shows the statement to be a logical fallacy.
Try observing something concrete, not abstract. Try seeing it in a different way than people usually see it, then try writing about that. If you can throw in a metaphor for good measure. Also try reading more (some) poetry, immerse yourself in it. If the talent is there the poems will come.
Welcome to the site,
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.